Prisoners of Time, Revised

We are all virtual prisoners of time
guarded by ticking hands of the clock
trapped in flashbacks gnawing at our minds
that feed our fears as we take useless stock


A vapid predator in the night they stalk
when we are most vulnerable and weak
under cloak of darkness with stealth they walk
in the mid-watch hours when all seems bleak


Into our quagmire of self-doubt they creep
prodding at the tenderest pink scars
in a whining voice they ardently speak
preying on our imaginary horrors


But then through the portal comes hope; a golden dawn
for all worries vanish in the healing light of dazzling sun.

©2019 Linda Lee Lyberg

Author’s Note: I worked on a revision to this sonnet, so the last couplet is a resolution. Many Thanks for the feedback!

dVerse Poets Pub: https://dversepoets.com/2019/01/03/poetry-forms-the-sonnet/

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22 Comments on “Prisoners of Time, Revised

  1. This was really beautiful Linda, and very haunting. Being an insomniac my bedtime is 4-5 AM, so the night is a big part of my life. I really like those hours of darkness when most folks are asleep. It is my favorite time to write or maybe read. If my life has current struggles thos hours can sometimes be bleak, but usually they are full of creativity – sometimes even bliss.

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  2. I enjoyed the beginning flow and the setting as my mind tried to understand.

    Questions for The second stanza: first line, you say “they stalk” — who is “they”? The next line says “we” , so the we is not they they or the predator. The pronouns and characters were suddenly confused for me.

    So if all that could clear up, for a reader like me, it would reach deeper.

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