Charmed Chaos
Charmed Musings on Life, Love, and Linguine
Only Us
Can we pretend it didn’t happen
this slow erosion of our cherished love?
Can we suspend the chilling moment
when two hearts no longer beat in tune?
–Imagine, it’s only us for one minute–
With the radiant stars in our eyes,
when our breath breathes life into each other
Familiar arms embrace, as tender pulses race
having found that brilliant flash of desire once again
©2018 Linda Lee Lyberg
Author’s Note: This is my first time to write a Puente: Puente is a rewarding form created by James Rasmusson. The word puente means bridge in Spanish, and–naturally–this lovely form features a bridge. It is a simple idea:
- Three stanzas
- First and third stanzas have equal number of lines (your choice how many)
- Middle bridge stanza is one line, encloses in dashes or tildes
- Middle bridge stanza serves as last line for first stanza and first line for last stanza
Real Toads: http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2018/12/fussy-little-forms-puente.html
Poets United:http://poetryblogroll.blogspot.com/2018/12/poetry-pantry-432.html
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Oh, I find this form intriguing, love the idea of a bridge. You have executed it so well. I might try one!
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Thank you Sherry!
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Oh! Such a great use of the bridge line between what is and what was or could still be. Nice!!
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Thank you Marian!
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It’s lovely.
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Thank you Sadje!
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You’re welcome
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🙂
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When love withers, there is no pretending…
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…still, a bit of flame can certainly be found, if one looks. I really like the contrast between the first and last stanzas.
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Thank you so much!
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So true. Thank you!
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This is incredibly romantic! 😀 I especially adore the bridge ❤️
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Thank you Sanaa.
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A very nice use of the form.
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Thank you!
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Excellent!
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Thank you!
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Truly, a beautiful romantic poem that could break the most cynical of hearts. Only wish, more people felt this way.
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Thank you kindly.
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A very simple form and not fussy at all. I liked the contrast of your two stanzas – the coldness in the first and the spark being reignited in the second. Great job!
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Thank you kindly Toni!
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This is truly beautiful! You did a wonderful job with the form.
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Thank you so much!
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You have written so well what it feels like when love leaves and the yearning to return to its fire.
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Sometimes a little effort, a little humility, kindness, reaching out and we CAN get relationships back. I personally think people don’t like the whole idea of saying “I’m sorry” and unwilling to forgive. It is easier to walk away.
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Thank you. I agree. Relationships take work.
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It feels as though you might have composed this with me in mind, I thank you. It is a beautiful poem.
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Thank you so much. I am so happy you enjoyed it.
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Like this a lot, Linda. Your bridge made the very improbable third stanza seem to be fully acceptable. Nice!!
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Linda. Spell Fix made this all wrong.
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Lol- did you mean improbable?
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Thank you Jim.
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Like this a lot, Linda. Your bridge made the very improbable third stanza seem to be fully acceptable. Nice!!
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I’ve never seen this form of poetry before, and I like it!
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Yes, I like it too. Thank you for stopping by.
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questing, and then hopeful. well done ~
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Thank you so much.
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